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Ummm

Personally, I have no idea how this song made it into the top 30.

The layering on this song is bad as well as the instruments are low quality. If this is supposed to be a for a video game, perhaps it could work. This work classifies more as a low quality 8 bit tune for a video game and strikes me as such material.

Some of the drum sequences are decent, but canned and recycled. The arpeggios are alright, but the tune itself fails to inspire or even capture the imagination much. With sub-mediocre work, and low quality synths this should not be a top 30 song.

For a beginner's work, it is not too bad, as you have a solid basic composition. You are right that the transitions are rough. That can be covered by using perhaps a break method, or you can work on fixing them.

You have the most basic of melodies, which is really nothing more than a backing track consisting of a drum track and bassline with a little bit of midline to support it.

There -is- enough of the right elements to consider this track as techno, but I would only consider this a first-fruit effort.

Understand I'm not trying to be harsh or anything.

What equipment/software did you use to make this track?

ragingmullet responds:

I made this over a year ago and I no longer even have the files for which I made it with. But I did it with a combination of Fruity Loops 7 and Reaper.

This song was intended to sound kinda cheesy/video game-esk.

Indeed the instruments are low quality, that's what happens when one does not have the money to buy 1000$ sound pack libraries or sample accurate editing software.

Regarding the drums...I'm not sure what your implying by "canned and recycled." Every single drum part you hear I wrote literally note by note, beat by beat, and sound/voice by voice. In-other words none were pre-made, though I did repeat some of the grooves after developing them.

Okayyyyy hmm

This doesn't quite qualify as HH. It has a hardcore thread, and vibe. It's got the right speed. The problem is in the note/chord progression. It gives a much darker feel rather than being light and happy. No amount of high end bright and happy will fix the mid and basslines if they aren't written with the same energy.

The note progression rising by only say a half note/step at each section is hurting you, and the key changes jumping the way they do could be re-structured for a better sound. As it is, this sounds more like fight music from say Final Fantasy Adventures or maybe one of the other Final Fantasy games.

Good attempt, but I think you might want to go back to the drawing board a little bit. I do agree the track needs more of a dance influence.

AetherFlaer responds:

Thanks for the breakdown. I'll go back to the drawing board. This was really my first attempt at HH.

Beautiful

I don't usually give much credit to the Hip Hop section, as it's usually all the same. This however, is a beautiful peice.

Could you tell me what piano setup you used for this. It sounds fantastic!

T-Free responds:

Thanks for the kind words, Tearstone.^^
The piano vst I used for this is called jazz baby and it's free of charge, you can get it here: http://www.kvraudio.com/get/2605.html

AWESOME

I cant wait for a full and complete version. This rocked.

X-Dream responds:

Haha thanks!
Be on the look out then!

hmmm

This particular song reminds me of some work by Jon Hallur aka RealX. He's a professional composer who works for Crowd Control Productions or CCP Games, specifically creating music for EVE Online and probably Dust514.

Sawdust responds:

I'm glad you like it!

Not bad

I like the lead synth you used. The melody is a bit repetitive, but not bad for only a few days of making music.

I wouldn't term this Funk though, this I believe would belong in the Techno category. Nice work, so far, though I think your kick should have come in sooner, like say at the 30 second mark or so, but that's my own personal style. Also, an off-beat/kick bassline might add a little bit more flavor to the overall track, but that's something to experiment and play with for a new track anyway.

Keep working at it, this is a great beginning effort!

Rellor responds:

Thank you and I just changed this song 2 techno. I put it down as funk because I couldn't find techno in the genre box at first.

ZOMG

Dude, seriously I cant wait to get home and play this song in Audiosurf!

DJ-Babokon responds:

Cool! That's pretty awesome.

OMG!!

YOU'RE ON FIRE!!

I gotta use this next time I get into a dog-fight in a flight sim or something!

rtnario responds:

AH GOD *extinguishes self*

Thanks, glad you liked it, and your flight sim + this as BGM idea sounds interesting. :D

Sounds good

I like the idea, however you need to take your high notes, which I believe are piano keys and turn the volume down on them just a little. They are overpowering everything else. Music is built dynamically from the bass, like a pyramid. The high notes should not overpower everything else. Plus, their volume makes them painful to the ears when listening to this track loudly.

Otherwise, very good job! So far that's the only thing I would tweak.

OPQC responds:

thanks for the good comment of the instruments. i'll try to fix them when i finish this up.

Good start

I cant wait to see what the rest of it turns out like. Right now its simple with only a single drum track and synth line. I think this could be woven into something much more.

Excellent initial concept for a track, though it is a little 'unrested'. There's no real pause to any section of the melody. The notes have almost a legato flow into one another.

djresset responds:

thanks

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